Footbag poem

[Muffinman]

Hey, I wrote this in 2002 and just came across it looking through old stuff. I really like it except I always thought my last couple lines were really corny; I didn't know what do about it though, 'cause that's what I wanted to say. It's kind of specifically formatted, so I'll just link it instead of rewriting it. I'd love to know what you think. It really expresses how I feel about footbag.

http://www.hackrifice.com/chanarchive/020629.txt

[Sporatical_Distractions]

I didn't think those last lines were corny.

it was a very well written poem. this line would have described footbag in itself IMO (all the and's caught me off gaurd though) :

physically incapacitated, thought endures the obsession.
reiterating and contriving and contemplating.
and mindfully exceeding ordinance of spirit. oppressing law.
constituting reality. fusing thought with action. and action with thought.
limits to our achievements do not exist.