new song

gMoney · Post by **gMoney** » 25 Jul 2007 11:30

I feel bad about posting this (eh, not really)

It took me about 20 minutes to write and put together, and my recording device is a piece of shit. But here it is:
First track: I Hate You Hate Yourself

http://www.myspace.com/papabearandtheforestoflove

Tell me if you like it or hate it or whatever. And feel free to check out the two other songs.

sanuke okumatzu · Post by **sanuke okumatzu** » 26 Jul 2007 08:33

Too repetitive , try throwing in some turn arounds and.... different riffs..It has some good potential if you keep working with it.

gMoney · Post by **gMoney** » 26 Jul 2007 20:01

eh, I'm not that great of a guitarist, so yeah I couldn't come up with anything other than that. It was the singing I was more concerned with.

QuantumBalance · Post by **QuantumBalance** » 26 Jul 2007 23:19

Just keep practicing.

sanuke okumatzu · Post by **sanuke okumatzu** » 27 Jul 2007 06:56

gMoney wrote:eh, I'm not that great of a guitarist, so yeah I couldn't come up with anything other than that. It was the singing I was more concerned with.

Tab out the song, then look at the passages. See what you can do to alternate between chorus and verse.

gMoney · Post by **gMoney** » 27 Jul 2007 07:36

hey, that sounds like a good idea

sanuke okumatzu · Post by **sanuke okumatzu** » 27 Jul 2007 10:40

Sounds a bit like engerica....

gMoney · Post by **gMoney** » 27 Jul 2007 14:24

I found different riffs that I could add, now I just gotta re-record. And I've never heard of Engerica before, but from what I've read on wikipedia I guess it would sound the same.

gMoney · Post by **gMoney** » 02 Aug 2007 16:02

Better?

I just finished re-recording it. Tell me what you think. It's kind of a weird song, but I kinda want my own style, and I don't want to sound exactly like the music I listen to, although I did steal the high-pitched falsetto singing from Mindless Self Indulgence and put kinda my own spin on it.