Can someone good at english help me a bit..

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Can someone good at english help me a bit..

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well actually i shold put this in homework help forum, but i have to hand in this book report by tommorw which is very rush for me and now i just choose Bible to write Lol. I think more ppl will read this forum so i posted it here, so plz correct my grammar and spelling please !! Tell me if u understand my book report or not plz !! Otherwise I cant play footbag that much :cry: :cry: :cry:
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The book I read is called Bible. Bible is the best sell book in the world. The author of Bible is God. Actually, I have heard that God use human's hands to write this book, so I think the author is God. There's many stories in Bible and I choosed the first chapter to read. The first chapter of Bible is called Genesis.
In the beginning of the play, God created heavens and earth, but the earth was formless and empty and it's covered by darkness. Therefore, God said, "Let there be light," and there was light. God thought light was good, so he seperated the light from darkness. God called the light "day," and the darkness he called "night." On the second day, God seperated the water and the sky. On the third day, God made the water gather in one place and called it "sea" and called the dry ground "land" Then God created plants and trees on the land that bear fruit with seed in it. On the fourth day, God created day and night. God also made stars and he set them on the sky to give light on the earth. On the fifth day, God created creatures of the sea and birds on the earth. On the sixth day, God created wild animals on the ground and God also created man in his own image. God also created male and female. God told them to rule over the fish of the sea and the birds of the air and over every living creature that moves on the ground. On the seventh day, God rested because he has finished all his works and he said no one should work on that day.
The next part is talked about Adam and Eve. When God made the earth, there's nothing on it, only stream came up from the earth and watered the whole surface of the ground. God formed the man from the dust of the ground and God planted a garden in the east in Eden. Then God made all kinds of trees grow out of the ground and made a river watering the garden from Eden. Later, God took the man and put him in Eden. God thought it was not good for the man to be alone, so he made a woman from the rib of man. God told them that they must not eat from the tree of the knowledge of good and evil or you will die.
There was a serpent appear in Eden. The serpent told Eve that she should eat the fruit from the tree God told her not to eat. The serpent told Eve that if she eat the fruits from that tree, her eyes will be opened and she will be like God, knowing good and evil. Eve listened to the serpent and ate the fruits, she also gave one to her husband. After they ate the fruits, their eyes were openend and they realized they were naked. They found something to cover their body and hide in somewhere. When God called to the man. Adam told God that he was afraid because he was naked. God asked him that why he knows he was naked. He told God Eve gave it to him. God then asked Eve why she did that, Eve told God the serpent deceived her, and she ate. God was so angry and kicked them out of Eden. I havent finish it yet, but I found out this is a very entertaining book and I recommended anyone who loves mythology story.
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ThisIsFate wrote: The book I read is called the Bible. TheBible is the best selling book in the world. The author of Bible is God. Actually, I have heard that God used humans' hands to write this book, so I think the author is God. There're many stories in Bible and I choose the first chapter to read. The first chapter of the Bible is called Genesis.
In the beginning (omitted), God created heavens and earth, but the earth was formless and empty and it was covered by darkness. Therefore, God said, "Let there be light," and there was light. God thought light was good, so he separated the light from darkness. God called the light "day," and the darkness he called "night." On the second day, God separated the water and the sky. On the third day, God made the water gather in one place and called it "sea" and called the dry ground "land". Then God created plants and trees on the land that bear fruit with seed in them. On the fourth day, God created day and night. (already mentioned? - confusing)God also made stars and he set them in the sky to give light on the earth. On the fifth day, God created creatures of the sea and birds on the earth. On the sixth day, God created wild animals on the ground and God also created man in his own image. God also created male and female. God told them to rule over the fish of the sea and the birds of the air and over every living creature that moves on the ground. On the seventh day, God rested because he had finished all his works and he said no one should work on that day.
The next part is (omitted about Adam and Eve. When God made the earth, there was nothing on it, only stream (steam?) came up from the earth and watered the whole surface of the ground. God formed (omitted)man from the dust of the ground and God planted a garden in the East in Eden. Then God made all kinds of trees grow out of the ground and made a river watering the garden from Eden. Later, God took the man and put him in Eden. God thought it was not good for the man to be alone, so he made a woman from the rib of man. God told them that they must not eat from the tree of the knowledge of good and evil or they would die.
There was a serpent that appeared in Eden. The serpent told Eve that she should eat the fruit from the tree God told her not to eat from*. The serpent told Eve that if she ate the fruit from that tree, her eyes would be opened and she would be like God, knowing good and evil. Eve listened to the serpent and ate the fruit, she also gave one to her husband. After they ate the fruit, their eyes were opened and they realized they were naked. They found something to cover their bodies and hid. When God called to the man, Adam told God that he was afraid because he was naked. God asked him (omitted) how he knew he was naked. He told God Eve gave him an apple from the Tree of Knowledge. God then asked Eve why she did that, and Eve told God the serpent deceived her, and she ate. God was so angry he kicked them out of Eden. I haven't finished it yet, but I found out this is a very entertaining book and I recommend it to anyone who loves mythology stories.
*technically one is not supposed to end a sentence with a preposition, but it's commonly used anyways.
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So how is my book report ok? Cuz i have 4 hors left !! I just woke up
And thanks for the correcting dude !! I am gonna print that at school~~
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Even though it's about 4 hours later now *cough*, your book report was pretty good, though I don't know what your experience with English is. You used a lot of diverse words and diverse sentence structures. One mistake you consistently made though was in using the subjunctive (or rather, not using it). If you want me to explain when and why it is used, just let me know. I'd imagine there's a similar tense in your native language.

Best of luck!
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Sand THANK you VERY MUcH~!! Next time if i have any essay i will let u know :D May be u can do teach english 8)

I just got back from school after playing footbag. And my english teacher said i am creative lol and had to represent my book report in front of my class :P
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